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(Contains: ideologically sensitive material)
           You were just a doll. A worthless thing that could be used for whatever purposes. From a sexual partner to a babysitter for your children. 'they're ugly and hideous creatures. they deserve whatever horrible paths they follow.' but you look just like them. you were human. With your once shinning (h/c) hair, and now dull (e/c) eyes. You were once a normal happy child who loved to smile. but ever since you're 'accident' you were now labeled as a doll, the lowest rank in this Utopia. Your own parents didn't want you. No one even wanted to look at you. You've been abused by all these old and worthless men, who just loved little girls like you. They would always say 'Your so hideous. Cry for me.' when you did not obey you would be abused more and a little piece would break from your heart each time. You hated them. you hated everyone. Soon you started to believe them and started to hate your self. When the last piece of your heart was about to break,an angel saved you from the darkness that was your hate.

It was just a normal day were the same men would come, abuse you, then leave. You lived in a small apartment crushed between a supermarket and a liquor store. You've been assigned in this neighborhood to collect money from the abusers and you were to send back to the corporation. There was a system for the dolls. Dolls are just not used for sexual purposes but they are also used for trade, slavery, man labor, and other cruel jobs. You have never met another doll but there is a rumor stating that the president of the corporation has died and his son would now take his place. He was supposed to be extremely handsome and caring but also rich. 'But I'll never be able to meet him. Besides he would be discussed with me. A young slut who never bathed.' you would always say this to your self. and you believe every word.
This is like a totally short preview but leave a comment and give me your opinion. please excuse my demented mind. :iconbowplz:
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Roronoa-D-Riku Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks so interesting!! PLEASE CONTINUE!!
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012   Writer
sadly i kinda broke my finger so its gonna be a Little late then i expected.
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Roronoa-D-Riku Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
OKAY ^^ I hope your finger gets better !!
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012   Writer
Thank you!
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i-lurve-music Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
love for this story! <3
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   Writer
i don't understand why!!!!! why do so many people love this?! i wasn't even thinking about finishing it but i guess i will since so many people like it
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i-lurve-music Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Good. It's so awesome no matter what you think.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   Writer
thank you
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MasuraFox Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it....
this....
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THIS.
IS.
SPARTA GOODNESS.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   Writer
:iconmegablushplz: t-thank you!!!
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MasuraFox Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
NO PROB BRO.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012   Writer
:)
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:iconwhisperingwatermelon:
Sounds really interesting! I'd like to read it when you're done. :D
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   Writer
hehehe :iconblushplz: thanks.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   Writer
:3
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Nyxs-Shadow Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
AWESOME!!!!
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   Writer
you like it?
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Nyxs-Shadow Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
yep. I LOVE IT!!
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012   Writer
good..
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Nyxs-Shadow Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
XD
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012   Writer
hehe
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ImagineChaos Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
Interesting concept, I like it!! Hate to be a grammar nazi n shit but I think the word you're looking is 'disgusted' in the last sentence.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
ya i know XD i corrected that in the final. Im glad you like it! i dont know why so many people like it. the final will either be posted on Friday or Saturday.
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ImagineChaos Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
I think people like it because it's different compared to other fanfics. At least that's why I like it.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
this whole thing makes me blush for some reason
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RussiaGermanyFangirl Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Its awesome~! but just curious how old is the reader in this? XD it said young but I just wanted to know the age range.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
OH..... damn... hmmm i'll get back to you on that!
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RussiaGermanyFangirl Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
haha XD
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   Writer
ok so like im almost done and it gos into more detail about the society and reader chan~
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RussiaGermanyFangirl Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
woo! sorry for the late response, but I cant wait!
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012   Writer
the full version of part 1 is out and so is two. 3 is in progress
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C-io Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
So interesting ;w;
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
well thank you
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HetaliaRussiaGirl Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
This is awesome! ^w^ please please please please pllleeeeeeaaaaaaasssssseeeee have the full version out soon! >w<
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
I'll try for you my random citizen!!! And thank you i still can't believe its this popular!
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Sksstar Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Holy mother of Russia.. That was deep... I can't wait for more :D
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
And it will come
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IzzyLuvsYou22 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it :D
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012   Writer
Omg thank you!!!!! Here have a hug~ :iconslowhugplz:
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IzzyLuvsYou22 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconsupertighthugplz: Hehe :D. I look forward to the full thing :D.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
I made this 10 minutes before i went to bed. but it sure is popular.
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IzzyLuvsYou22 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's because you are an amazing writer!
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
:iconmegablushplz: oh thank you!! but this is like my first official fan fiction
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IzzyLuvsYou22 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Really! That is your first! Holy Crap because you are really awesome :D.
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198329 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
thanks!!! The official draft will either be posted on Friday or Saturday (school work)
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